希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;文章在句法方面做的很棒,从句和复杂句的使用不错;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
I have a good friend called Lily,who is my classmate. She is a happy girl with black straight hair and the same age as me. I like to play with her because she can make our conversation funny and she brings me to some interesting places as well. Besides,she has a lot of story book in her house,so I sometimes go to her house for reading them.