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Dear President Wang, I am happy to send a letter to you. I am introduce that my name is Li Ming. I am a freshman and from class two grade one. I like university life and our school, but I don't like the canteen service on campus. The service include meal quility, price, condition and so on. I know that this is my feeling, but I still have something to tell you and holp that the canteen will correct action. Please review below my advice. First of all, there is bug or hair in a meal. I hope worker of the canteen must clear wash the rice, fish, meat and vegetable. Second,we come from a general family. We can pay for one meal, but we couldn't afford to a month meal fee. So could you make down the meal fee? At last, we have a meal in a dirty room where dirty water on the floor. Sometime we can't find a seat whether we are late. If you arrange for some workers clean the floor and add some seats in the room, we will be happy. And you arrange for one man to check the canteen service. Your student Li Ming
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