文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
I have a good friend. she is a beautiful girl. she has long black hair, two big black eyes and a red mouth. her voice is better. she is good at sin She is a clever girl. She likes reading books , playing computer games and chess. she is also nice. she often helps us . our classmates like her very much.