作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;作者词汇表达比较多样,也能较好的使用一些学术词汇;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Boys and girls, May I have your attention, please?I appreciate the chance to speak in public very much. In my opinion, there are both advantages and disadvantages of watching TV. First, I wolud like to say something beneficial of watching TV. It is convenient for us to acquire information through TV, which can help us get knowledge of world and command more important knowledge. As we all know,TV is a very direct way to get in touch with the latest news. Therefore, it helps us save much time of serching the new through Internet. Second, watching TV also has some disadvantages. It may affect our eyesight if we don't pay attention to the time or distance when watching TV. Besides, it may also disturb us of studying. All in all, we should make proper use of TV.