拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Boys and girls May I have your attention,please?Today our topic is watching TV.There is no doubt that Every coin has two sides.So watching TV has both advantages and disadvantages. First,we can get information as well as knowledge more conveniently through watching TV which helps us know about the world better.What's more,students can learn how to communicate with others,which can make a large difference in their whole lives.But watching too much TV may hurt our eyes.You know that more and more students are becoming eye-sighted.And there is no denying that if students spend too much time on TV,it will have a bad influence on their study. To sum up,we should watch TV in a proper way.