作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
My hometown is a beautiful village near the capital of HuNan province. In the past, you could see lots of trees wherever you go. What's more,the river was very clean so that you can see many fish in it. People's houses were extremely simple and the streets were so long. People's life were very simple too. Today, you can see a lot of high buildings anywhere. Diffrent cars are running in the streets. The development of industry destroyed the environment. More and more trees has been cut down and more and more fish are disappearing. The most important thing we should do, in my opinion, is to decrease the pollution.