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Do you know ? My hometown have a lot of interesting place .what"s more ,my hometown have all kinds of ancient consture.for example ,the great wall. it is locate in beijing.gu gong also locate in beijing and so on .The ancient consture reprsesnt our countary history.It is symbal our countary.the same time ,for one thing when we doing to vist the interesting place ,for another ,we can learn about our china development . Besides ,we can taste plent of delicious noodles.if you have interest ,you can liing along time .you can like our countary ,our countary is beauty .