可适当增加从句和长句的使用;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Nowadays, a majority of parents have only one chlid.So,they are very concern about their child's life.Furthermore, some parents do anything about them. With the development of society,more and more company prefer to recruit those have good quality and ability.So,people should pay attention to calculate children. Leading them to be confidence and independent.So, what should parents do is let it go when your children meet difficult.And then,don't give them too much money.The most impotence is encourage them to do something what they want to try.Though they fail themselves,parents have to tell them how to face failure. As a college,what I think is that we should try our best to become a confident,brave and independent person.I believe we can do it well.