作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇;句式变化较为明显,另外句法层面做的不错;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Boys and girls, May I have your attention,please?With the rapid development of science and technology,every family has their own television.The television can make us know the world easier,but it has disadvantage,too. In my opinion,every thing has both advantages and disadvantages. Wether the advantages become more than disvantages depends on how to use it.Some people think television will lead to decrease their marks,but at same time some people think they can learn new knowledge by television.Although watching TV much time is harmful to our eyes,it can make us know more information about this world. In summary,if you can use TV correctly,it will enrich your knowledge,but if you devote much time on it,it will do harm to your study and body.