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I'm in Yuying middle school.There are two classroombuilding,a big ground and big classroom.It has twenty one boy and twenty girls in a class.We have seven subject must study.My favourite subject is P.E,because i can play basketball with my classmates.We all enjoy ourselves.We can also keep fit.I like playing basketball so i'm good at basketball.I want to enter the school basketball team.