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I have a good friend.She is a beautiful girl.She has two big and bright eyes,a long hair and a small mouth.She likes play the piano ,dancing,reading book,play computer games and so on.She's charactor is kind and active.She always tryher best to do everything.She likes a ball of fire.I like she.