拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;全文结构较为严谨。
Mental health plays a more important role in students' daily life now,which is well known to us all.As is reported that a growing number of college students have no idea how to control their spirit.which has caused so many tragedies like suicide.Hence,it is high time for us to learn how to improve our own mental health. On the one hand,the school should conduct mental health course for students or organize various of campaigns about mental health to attract students take part in the mental health improvement project.On the other hand,the students themselves first of all need to absolutely realize the importance of mental health,and the put themselves into the practice of improving mental health. Birds need blue sky,flowers need sunshine and our mankind need better mental health.Only with good situation of mental health can we get higher efficiency and be more successful.