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Weekend was a sunny day.I and my parents went to the safair park.My feelings were beyond my description.There very beautiful and animals were friendly to us. There were many monkeys and tigers.Tourists were fed monkeys and played with tigers.I think we should friendly to animals they are our friends.And it is important to protect environment so we shouldn't drop litter carelessly. We kenw protect animals was very important So protecting wild animals and plants is just protecting ourselves.