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I have a good friend ,her name is Lucy!I good luckiy she is my friend!We are usually go window shoping and travel together!we aer feeling happyless everday.she is very beautiful.she weared beautiful clothes ,she have a beautiful daughter!Her daughter is a lovely girl .My Friend is34 years old !but she thought is 24 years !