文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;建议在衔接词汇方面加强积累;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用;连词使用偏少。
The weekend was a sunny day.I and my parents went to the safari park.My feelings were beyond my description.There were very beautiful and animals were friendly to us. There were many monkeys and tigers.Tourists were fed the monkeys and played with the tigers.I think we should friendly to animals they are our friends.And it is important to protect environment so we shouldn't drop litter carelessly. We knew protect animals was very important So protecting wild animals and plants is just protecting ourselves.