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As we all know ,saftey is very impointant .As for as I am concerd ,school safety is must be notic,Then,How to immprove school safety ,Let us follow these tips to protect our life. First,we should add many security guard in ampus.childen must know about safety something.Secondly,presant should meet childen when after school.