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As we all know,safety is very important.As far as I am concerd,school safety is must be alam,Then,How to improve school safety,Let us follow these tips to protect our life. First,we should add many security guard in ampus.Children must know about safety something.Secondly,present should meet children when after school.It goes was saying that present should not ingore chlidren life.