2011年12月英语四级作文真题:坚强的意志

过渡词很丰富，衔接词同时使用的恰到好处；句子错误偏多，建议修改；文中词汇表达比较多样，能多用学术词汇就更好了；请注意分段。

everyone in the world should to something special for himself,including success and failure and so on ,it's difficult to succeed if you have no strong will ,in other words ,strong will is the key point that you get succeed .absolutely a few of people want to get more great achieve when he or she have own the great ability for example strong will ,only if you believe you can do it and you have the strong will so you have had the half of success ,recently think about the students ,if a student don't study hard ,maybe some day he will get the failure even he become a useless man forever. this is my conclusion :nothing succeeds without a strong will