简单句比重稍微偏高,注意个别句子错误;作者词汇表达不够灵活,但有些单词拼错了;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
As we all realize,safety is extremely important.As far as I am concede,school safety is must be alarm,Then,How to improve school safety,Let us follow these tips to protect our life. First,we should add many security guard in campus.Children must know about something safety.Secondly,present should meet children when after school.It goes was saying that present should not ingore chlidren life.