拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
As we all realize,safety is extremely important.As far as I am concede,school safety is must be alarm,Then,How to improve school safety,Let us follow these tips to protect our life. First,we should add many security guard in campus.Children must know about something safety.Secondly,present should meet children when after school.It goes without saying that present should not ignore children life.Third,whenever we must remember we are civil people which can stop us anger .Therefore,maybe we are most safety. Our life that is intensely important thing.We are in a confutable life.So,let us against with evilly people together.