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Hi!I'm X X X.Let me show you around our school. There are 24 classroom.Our classroom is on the second floor.Look This is classroom .Is big and clean,you can see fifty desks and chairs on our class.I have forty-nine classmates. We have a big playground.There are two computer rooms.There's a library too.There're on the third floor. Music room and art room it's on the first floor.The table tennis room is on the playground.