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Last week,we go to the zoo.There were many people.Some of them were feeding the mokeys.Others were playing with the tigers.All people can get on with animals.It let me remember that these days peole always kill the animals to get money.I know we should protect the animals.Because they are our friends.And we should protect environment,it is very important.So we should not throw the rubbish in the zoo.We all know protect the animals' importance,because protect them is protect ourselves.