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Kelly Lam made a survey about the views of sharing feelings among China students last weekend. And the result was that over 3o% of the students were unwilling to sharing with others whatever they were happy or depressed. And chirdren have learnt little the importance of the sharing from the our education. As far as the experts're concerned, it was neccessory to learn sharing feelings in the time we live. And it was much favorable for growing in the future to learn how to share feelings.
