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Kelly Lam made a survey about the views of sharing feelings among China students last weekend. However,more than 3o% of students were unwilling to sharing with others whatever happy or upset. Because our education haven't made children know the importance of the sharing. As far as the experts're concerned, it was necessary to absort how to share feelings in the time we live. In addition to, it was much favorable for growing in the future to take in how to share feelings.
