作者应多多注意句式变化;文中拼写错误比较多,同时请注意积累词汇量;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Olymoic communite: Accroding application of English Volunteer, I apply for the position as a English Volunteer. I have a good commad of English and love to help people when they are in trouble. I am have a keen interested in helping. Thanks for you consideration to pay attention. 6,23,2008