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June,23rd,2008 Dear sir and madam, I' m writing to appy for the position of a English interpreter for the 2008 Beijing Olympic games. My name is Li ming, 22-year-old. studied as a sophomore student in Beijing normal university at the present, and I have a good commad of English. I am kind and freindly to others and am keen interested in all kinds of Olympic activities. Thefore, I really appreciate and hope to contribute my part to the 2008 Beijing Olympic games. Thanks for you consideratio of my application. I am looking forward to your early reply. yours Sincerely, Li Ming