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June,23rd,2008 Dear sir and madam, I' m writing to appLy for the position of a English interpreter for the 2008 Beijing Olympic games. My name is Li ming, 22-year-old. Studied as a sophomore student in Beijing normal university at present, and I have a good command of English. I am kind and freindly to others and am keen interested in kinds of Olympic activities. Thefore, I really appreciate and hope to contribute my part to the 2008 Beijing Olympic games. Thanks for your consideration of my application. I am looking forward to your early reply. yours Sincerely, Li Ming