文章词汇表达比较灵活,学术词汇的使用要继续加强;把握下长难句在文中的分布;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
It's known to all that there is a will there is a way,and it's easily to get another words all roads lead to Room.So every young man with a dream try their best to make the dream come true.But things always goes tough,if we put all eggs in one basket,the fault will come to us. So I always think it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket. So if we want to success .we must find more way to fight for.By this way,we can be prepared if one way can not get through.And we can be more confidence when have to make a choice to keep our career.Things can be easier than we have only one way to go. And more ways means more chance to success.Living in an competition society ,it's also means we can have more ways to live successful.So it's unwise to put all eggs in one basket.