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I have a good freind . Her name is Lily and she is a beautiful girl. She is not tall or short. She has black long hair and two big eyes. She likes playing badminton and playing the piano. She is very friendly to me. When I am unhappy , she always try to make me happy. She is really a nice girl. I like her very much.