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Hello, everyone.Today, I will discuss about"Change the unchangeable" with you.In the modern world, everything in the rapid development. Human has changed the world and make the impossible things possible. As we know, not everything can change, we can't change the past but we can change the future. If you had learning now, your future will be better. For me, My math is very poor in high school, every examination scores are always unsatisfactory.I slowly promise must to learn math well.I insist every day to complete a certain amount of math exercise, sign up the mistake and ask the teacher in next day. In this day, my math has made great progress.In my eyes, as long as we insist on work hard, impossible things will be possible. In a foreign country, we also can find some examplelike this. Henry Ford produce his famous V-8 motor and he used his own experiments and to convince the engineers. He was the only one when he faced the question of a people insist on and finish the experiment. So Henry Ford was succesful because he understood and applied the principles of success. Many people did not dare to try, to challenge.So many things are impossible in their eyes.In fact, as long as we do harder than now, we can change the unchangable.