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My views on Online Shopping Nowdays,more and more people are changing the ways of shopping from stores to online ,and people have different oppions towards this problem. In my oppoin,shopping online have both advantages and disadvantages.On the one hand,compared with shopping in the shop and stores,shopping online not only is convient but also can save your money,as we know,the price of goods on the internet is lower than that in the real shops or stores.On the other hand, shopping online do have its disadvantages,for example,when you scain the goods on the internet,you can only see the pictures,you can not touch the thing ,you can't know material of the goods,and sometimes many online shop would put the pictures which is not suitable for the real goods in the net page. Based on these,I think people should not shop online blindly,and learn to protect ourself on the Internet.