单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
Lily is one of my good friends. She is a beautiful girl. Her hair is long and black. She has a pair of big eyes, a small mouth. Her face is round, like a ball. She is very interesting, because she often speaking jokes for us. I really enjoy playing with her.