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I have a good friend. she is a beautiful girl. she has long black hair, two big black eyes and a red mouth. her voice is better. she is good at singing. She is a clever girl. She likes reading books , playing computer games and chess. she is also nice. she often helps us . our classmates like her very much i have a good friend she is abeautifui girl