可适当增加复合句和从句的使用;文中词汇表达方面较丰富灵活,但在学术词汇的积累上还要再接再厉;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
The ariticle tells us that visitors can pay to leave their marks on the fake Great Wall.It not only benefits the profits of the management but also gets some critics from audience. Many visitors in China tend to take photos or leave their marks when they go to a famous place. This has become a fashion among visitors nowadays. I have really seen some marks on the famous cultural treasures, such as, "Jack has been here." In my opinion, if they draw so much on the treasure, it will denefinately pollute or even destory the treasures gradually. However, people's passion of leaving their marks can also not be forbidden. Therefore, some helpful methods have to come out to solve the problems. To some degree, I agree with the idea that whoever wants to leave marks can do it by paying expensive fees. This is not a good way to earn money but also a helpful way to reduce the damage of the marks if visitors can not afford to pay the fee. The fake wall is a great place for visitors to express their emotion to the places of interest and also offers an opportunity for visitors to enjoy the beauties in the way they like.