2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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I would like to show you the natural while modern Shenzhen, a coastal city in China. Shenzhen is famous for its beautiful costlines. The mangrove coast, Dameisha beach, and Happy coastline are the most famous spots in Shenzhen which attract thoudsands of tourists sharing the breeze and sun bath. Besides of its natural scenary, Shenzhen have built a lot of entertainment places such as Window of the World and Happy Vally. The Window the World is a significant place you don't want to miss, for it allows tourists to adventure all the famous spots in the world. Actually, you might find your own Country's landmark models in it.