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How time flies!We will leave the Middle school。We have started in the school for three years,In these years,i have some good friends,Li Lei is one of my best friends。 He has a warm heart,he likes to help others very much and he is very outgoing,So lots of people like him very much! He has plenty of interests,for example:running、Playing computer and so on。 He is good at all subjects,but i‘m not do well in them,so he always helps me。 Because of his help,i 'm good at my subjects,I'm very thanks for him,so i will give a toy car to him,because that is his best toy。 Best wishes to Li Lei!