拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
More and more students want to become government employees after they graduate from college.Many people support it but others against it.And one coin has two sides.On one hand,not only do they get good pay but also they can have more holidays after they get the jobs.On the other hands there are so many people join in the exams that we are likely to lose the chance to become a government employees. And we will waste much useful time.Also we can find other better jobs. What's reason do they so craze with the civil service exams? The first reason is that they have little confident about themselves and they don't know how to seek a suitable job.So taking the exams is the best choice for them.The second reason is that chinese people tend to respect persons who work for government employees.They will get a sense of success.The lost but not least,after they retired from their jobs,they can get a better wage.