作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;可适当增加长句和复杂句的使用;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
In the passage, the writer tells us they had enough time to play in their childhood. They hadn’t worries at all. While they are growing up, the worries come upon them. Their spare time is becoming less and less and they have to spend more time on their homework to get an excellent mark. In that case, they feel growing up boring. In my opinion, growing up is really boring. As a teenager, I have to deal with a lot of worries while growing up. We have to take all kinds exams every year. We have to go to school very early in the morning and get home very late in the evening. We are also worried about have friends and being popular at school. Although we face worries, we should seek support from our friends, parents and teachers to solve them and try to find pleasure in growing up.