2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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First of all ,I am extremely cheerful for you that you can go to travel my hometown.On the one hand ,I will visit some cultural heritage with you ,so we can go to the town of ZhengLong ,which is a special town with 2000 years history,and it notable for its old and culture .On the other hand , Maoming's forest park is a good place ,because there are a great deal of games ,and that is why some child in favor of there , what's more ,many adults will go there because its beauty.Of course ,in my hometown ,not only these interestingplace,when you arrive ,i will show your more,Lastly ,i look forward for your coming.