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Hangzhou has set up several zebra crossings in the spot of a terrible accident caused by a drunk driver 。Ironically ,another drunk driving accident occurred on the same crossing ,crushing a girl to death。 Drunk driving will bring many unfavorable consequences 。Those who drive after drinking are more likely to drive at exceeding speed ,thus breaking the traffic rules and bringing about unnecessary accidents。What's more ,such accidents will surely bring great loss to the drivers ,passengers and the whole society。Worst of all ,the victims including some innocent passers-by may get injured or even killed in the accident。 So I strongly claim that those who drinking after driving should be punished severely 。Drunk driving has become a serious problem。Not only dies it disturb the normal traffic order but also brings great harm to people's precious lives。 It is time that we called on the efforts from all sides to deal with drunk driving properly。