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Top Meal of the Day A recent study shows that about 50% teenagers have the habit of having no breakfast in Beijing. There are several reasons to explain the phenomenon. For one thing, they can have more time to sleep in the morning since they have stayed up so late at night.For another thing, parents are too busy to take care of their children, so they let children buy breakfast by giving money. In addition, some girls usually don't have breakfast for the purpose of keeping slim. However, having no breakfast can result in bad effects,such as, feeling sleepy in class all day, reducing attention in class, getting unqualified scores. This problem has to be solved. Here are some suggestions. Have breakfast everyday since it offers 30% energy of the whole days' need and it attributes to creative mind. Therefore, teenagers should change the habits from breakfast.