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The summer holiday is coming. Our class have had a discussion about what to do during the holiday. Some are in favor of staying at home .They think it’s both convenient and comfortable. What’s more ,they can save money for other purposes .But they will lose the chance of getting to know that outside world. However ,others prefer to go out for traveling since it can increase their knowledge and broaden their horizons. But they will spend more money and meet some difficulties , while traveling. In my opinion, it would be much better stay at home ,for I can do what I like ,such as reading books ,watching TV, and helping my parents with the housework.