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After school my friends and I used to play volleyball together.As we were enjoy the time,my friends was let out a scream.It was means that something terrible happened.We were coming up him and sent him to hospital.As he tried to stand up he was failed.His leg was injured.Our teacher is happen to us.After know the thing,he carried Tom right away.It was pleasant that Tom's leg was not injured serious.But it was influence his action. So we had arrangement everyday have two students to look after Tom arrive school.The girls help Tom to eatery buy his favorite lunch and washed his tableware.Tom was very moved about everything we did.He needn't stand up when teacher ask him a question.We would not feel he was rude,because teacher had given him a privilege. I was very happy because we were like family members to look after everyone.We love each one.and made great progress.
