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Tom is my best friend and we are in the same age and in the same calss. He likes reading books, playing computer games, and doing sports. His eyes are big and bright, but recently he had to wear a pair of glasses because he watched TV too long and his sights became bad . Now he is not being allowed to touch computers and he fells very upset.