文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;应增加从句和复杂句的使用,注意部分有错误的句子;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
There is a lasted argument about whether the name is important.Of course.For everybody,name is the best great gift we got after we were born. People always not say the same thing,like this,some people are agree that the name is important,but the other people stand in the opposite.The supporters think that name is important.First of all,everyone has a name belongs to themselves and it's a symbol to distinguish identify of ours.What's more,we need a name in law to accept many things,such as,id card,report card,driving license and so on.Every coin has two sides,the other people think that name just a code,we needn't to pay more attentions to it.No matter do you have a name,we always live a happy life. As far as i'm concerned,To know a people always begins to know his name that is just a thing i always do,making friends and tell them my name,which is proud of me all the time.