运用了一些简单从句,但不是很熟练;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,另外文中有较多拼写错误;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
I have a nice friend and his name is LiXang.he is sun boy,like playing baskerball and watching television.he is old than 1 years old.he usualy in white a vest and a pants. one day,I go to swiming pool with LiXang.I do not swim,but he is skillful.so he teach me to swim.