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Dear David: My very happy you write letter to me.I know you will learn chinese to lanzhou, learn chinese ,Fist you must know how to like chinese ,the chinese is very importem to chinese.you learn chinese,must have many chinese friend,they can help you to learn chinese.you must this doing.as fast as I konw,the chinese is very easy.i think you can study veay well! ChenQuan you best friend