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The most interesting place that I desire to show them is polar land in Harbin which is usually called the heart of ocean. It located at another side of Songhua river and its easy to reach there by any transpotation way. In this park, you can see so many different animals from the ocean such as fish, whale, sea turtle and shark. Normally, people takes their chi