题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
能够很好的使用长难句且句法很棒;作者词汇表达较丰富准确,不过学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用;请注意分段;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;连词使用偏少。
My favorite novel is Around the World in Eighty Days which is written by Jules Verne. The author was born in France and devoted himself to literature and wrote several scientific romances, which gained him the name——Father of Modern Science Fiction. This is a book of science fiction which tells us an exciting story about an English gentleman, Mr. Phileas Fogg, who makes a bet with his clubmates and manages to travel around the world in eighty days. It gives us a vivid description of the many difficulties and incidents which happen on his journey.