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on my way home,it is raining heavily!it is good today.i learn that how to configure the siemens s7-400. my aunt must be thirty-five year old .in spite of this,she often wear black stocking and short stock and bright,orange-coloured dress.i look out the widows,it is still rainning.please make sure that you are available.